In the great scheme of things you'll receive an A with regard to effort and hard work. Where you actually lost everybody ended up being in your facts. You know, people say, details make or break the argument.. And it could not be much more correct here. Having said that, allow me inform you exactly what did work. Your article (parts of it) is actually pretty powerful and that is possibly the reason why I am making an effort in order to comment. I do not really make it a regular habit of doing that. Next, whilst I can certainly see the jumps in reasoning you come up with, I am not really convinced of exactly how you appear to connect the details which make the conclusion. For now I will, no doubt subscribe to your point but wish in the future you actually connect the dots much better.